Monday, January 12, 2009

The Writing Week (Vol. 2) part 54 - Make Every Beat Count


This week was all about finishing my outline. It’s actually one of the tougher times I’ve had writing an outline, since, for the first time I can remember, I consciously tried to make every beat matter. Yeah, I know that sounds pretty obvious – make your scenes important. But it’s easier said than done.

Outlines, at least to me, used to be a means to an end, a rough road map between Point A (the inciting incident) and Point B (the final FADE OUT). Everything in between was a stepping stone along the path, but like many paths, often wound up being fairly flat. Scenes didn’t always build in my outlines, and, for whatever ridiculous reason, I didn’t force myself to make them do that. I was content to incorporate a fairly redundant scene, because I guess I just figured I would iron it out in a later draft. Or, worse, scenes were used as filler between two larger, more important beats, so I didn’t care if they really worked or mattered. It was pretty awful.

This go around, though, I really, really worked at making sure that every beat not only lead to the next, but made a difference in the script. I deleted scenes that were repetitive or – just as bad – offered nothing new. If I knew I had to fill the gap between two important scenes, I made sure to do it with dialogue that, though not necessarily Earth shattering, at least moved things forward. I think my hair turned a bit greyer as I fretted over every single beat, but in the end, I certainly feel it was worth it.

The League is meeting next on Wednesday, which is when I’ll get notes from the rest of the group on my 8 page outline. However, Onyx has already read it and given me some thoughts on it. Most of them are questions he has due to the vagueness of some of the beats as I’ve written them. Since the outline is mostly for my benefit, I didn’t include all the major bits of information for outsider readers as I would if, say, I were sending this to a producer. Nonetheless, Onyx did offer a few interesting things for me to think about, ideas that could strengthen the dreaded Act Two. (Not to toot my own horn, but I’m pretty pleased with Act Two. It doesn’t drag nearly as much as Act Two tends to in my outlines, and in fact, builds pretty well. The second half of Act Two – in particular, pages 60-70 – tends to be the hardest part of the script to get right, and I’m sure will be the part that most requires re-writes later.) I’m still not 100% sure how Act Three will end, but I’m getting close.

At any rate, this is the most excited I’ve ever been for one of my scripts based off the outline. A big part of that is due to the fact that I feel the outline is pretty tight right now, and that all 87 “beats” I’ve listed (some are more montage type scenes that I included for reference) all seem to belong. What’s more, I’m looking forward to the writing, despite the fact that the story will offer me no surprises as I churn out pages. It’s a great feeling, and one I don’t often get from an outline. Maybe this is what happens when you know your outline works? I guess I’ll find out from The League on Wednesday.

Sunday, January 11, 2009

66th Annual Golden Globe Winners Announced


This just in - the winners of the 66th Annual Golden Globes.



Best Motion Picture - Drama
Winner: Slumdog Millionaire (2008)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Motion Picture - Drama
Winner: Mickey Rourke for The Wrestler (2008)

Best Television Series - Drama
Winner: "Mad Men" (2007)

Best Performance by an Actress in a Motion Picture - Drama
Winner: Kate Winslet for Revolutionary Road (2008)

Best Motion Picture - Musical or Comedy
Winner: Vicky Cristina Barcelona (2008)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Motion Picture - Musical or Comedy
Winner: Colin Farrell for In Bruges (2008)

Best Director - Motion Picture
Winner: Danny Boyle for Slumdog Millionaire (2008)

Best Performance by an Actress in a Television Series - Musical or Comedy
Winner: Tina Fey for "30 Rock" (2006)

Best Original Score - Motion Picture
Winner: Slumdog Millionaire (2008) - A.R. Rahman

Best Television Series - Musical or Comedy
Winner: "30 Rock" (2006)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Mini-Series or a Motion Picture Made for Television
Winner: Paul Giamatti for "John Adams" (2008)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Television Series - Musical or Comedy
Winner: Alec Baldwin for "30 Rock" (2006)

Best Screenplay - Motion Picture
Winner: Slumdog Millionaire (2008) - Simon Beaufoy

Best Performance by an Actress in a Mini-Series or a Motion Picture Made for Television
Winner: Laura Linney for "John Adams" (2008)

Best Foreign Language Film
Winner: Vals Im Bashir (2008)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Supporting Role in a Motion Picture
Winner: Heath Ledger for The Dark Knight (2008)

Best Mini-Series or Motion Picture Made for Television
Winner: "John Adams" (2008)

Best Performance by an Actress in a Motion Picture - Musical or Comedy
Winner: Sally Hawkins for Happy-Go-Lucky (2008)

Best Animated Film
Winner: WALL·E (2008)

Best Performance by an Actress in a Television Series - Drama
Winner: Anna Paquin for "True Blood" (2007)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Television Series - Drama
Winner: Gabriel Byrne for "In Treatment" (2008)

Best Performance by an Actress in a Supporting Role in a Series, Mini-Series or Motion Picture Made for Television
Winner: Laura Dern for Recount (2008) (TV)

Best Performance by an Actor in a Supporting Role in a Series, Mini-Series or Motion Picture Made for Television
Winner: Tom Wilkinson for "John Adams" (2008)

Best Original Song - Motion Picture
Winner: The Wrestler (2008)("The Wrestler")

Best Performance by an Actress in a Supporting Role in a Motion Picture

Winner: Kate Winslet for The Reader (2008)



I'm really happy for all of the awards that went to both THE WRESTLER and SLUMDOG MILLIONAIRE. Zombie and I just saw Slumdog yesterday. Like Onyx and 'Backer, we both really, really, liked it. Much more than either of us thought we would. It was nothing like what we thought it might be, and we were both really pleased with the end result. The Wrestler still remains my favorite film of 2008 (despite my unconditional love for The Dark Knight).

Also of note, if you haven't seen it: WALL-E is great (and pushing actually for a Best Picture - not Best Animated - nod for the Oscars; The Dark Knight - Heath Ledger was The Joker; and Recount - for a movie where you go in knowing the ending, it's pretty damn good. I haven't seen John Adams yet, but I was hearing good things before this set of wins, so I'll have to check it out.

Now just to see what the Oscars bring.

Saturday, January 10, 2009

Trailer Trash XXVIII: Universal Soldier (1992)

"The ultimate weapons of the future have declared war... on each other!"

Hey, kids, it's Van Damme time again! [Ed. note: If you're looking for the 1967 album Universal Soldier by Donovan, look elsewhere.]

By 1992, Jean-Claude Van Damme was something of a international megastar. Movies such as Kickboxer and Bloodsport (as well as previous Trailer Trash subject Cyborg) had launched him into the spotlight, and his name was a modest box-office draw for the action crowd. The guy could churn out several action flicks a year and they all seemed to make money.

Sure, some people criticized him. They knocked his acting skills - called it stiff, called it lifeless. Sure, the guy could kick, but he wasn't going to win any Oscars. How would Hollywood make a movie that disguised Jean-Claude's faults? Some genius producer found the perfect solution to that problem: "Let's cast him as a zombie-robot!"

"You think Van Damme's acting is stiff? Well, robots are stiff! Are you calling him lifeless? Zombies are lifeless! And you know who are good kickboxers? Zombie-robots!"

Thus, Universal Soldier was born.

Van Damme and Dolph Lundgren play soldiers who manage to kill each other in Vietnam. Thirty years later the government re-animates them as semi-cyborgs and sends them on all kinds of dirty missions as part of the UniSol Program (which sounds more like the name of a cleaning product than anything). Most of the plot unfolds when the Universal Soldiers' old personalities start to emerge (Van Damme = cheeky do-gooder, Lundgren = dickweed) and the government loses control of them. Yes, that means LOTS of kickboxing.



At 0:14 - Sealed for freshness!
At 0:21 - Jerry Orbach in the role he'd always be remembered for.
At 0:23 - Avert your eyes. Avert your eyes!
At 0:54 - Van Damme emotes.
At 1:00 - They should keep some beer in that trunk.
At 1:18 - Damn, took long enough for him to start kicking stuff.
At 2:10 - BOOM!


"Are we having fun yet?"

Trailer Trash is a weekly tribute to oddball, cheesy and often just plain terrible movie trailers. Writers: These movies got made... so can yours! You can read through our archive by clicking here.

Friday, January 09, 2009

Book Alert - The Real, Low Down, Dirty Truth About Hollywood Agenting by Rima Greer


A little while back, I came upon an article - I think it was in a screenwriting magazine - about a little known, yet incredibly informative book that all aspiring writers should read. The Real, Low Down, Dirty Truth About Hollywood Agenting by Rima Greer is a quick 176 page read all about selling a script from an agent's point of view. Despite the speed with which you can go through this book, Greer - an agent at Above the Line Agency - packs in a ton of information and I walked away from the book feeling much more knowledgeable about this mine field of an industry than I did before I started reading it. (Read: I knew so much more about what I hadn't even bothered to consider.)


As a writer who has recently signed with a manager, you can imagine that there are about 1,000 questions floating around my mind right now. Most of them are probably pointless, but they're still there. Greer's book answered many of them, reassured me of my worries, and raised a few more questions (and also instructs unrepresented writers on how to get their agent, hold an agent, or why they aren't attracting agents). The largest section of the book - and the one I was most interested in - deals with making a sale, how it happens, and what the deal and negotiation process is like. Anyone who thinks that their script can (or should) sell literally overnight should just erase that thought from their mind right now. As Greer points out, there are about six levels your script must pass through (from your agent liking it all the way up to the top development head at a major studio getting down with it) before it will be greenlit. At each of these steps, you can (and according to Greer, likely will) meet with rejection. Following that, if you are so fortunate as to sell something, there's so much negotiating for a writer's contract and perks on-set that I had never even thought to consider: travel, per diems, accommodation, cell phone, assistant, etc. The contract process alone can take a year.

Yes, the information can be unsettling, to say the least. But it's also invaluable. Greer shows just how difficult selling a script can be and how dedicated a writer (and his/her agent or manager) must be in a way that is funny, compelling, and encouraging. Despite the frequent mentions of it being "miraculous" when a spec script sells, I wasn't discouraged by the book. I found myself feeling strengthened by all the newly gained knowledge I had, knowledge that shed light on why my "masterpiece" might make it no further than the League if I don't fight for it with all my might. In addition, I came to see much more clearly the ins and outs of the industry, what I could expect as a first time writer, and what people in Hollywood mean when they say various things. (Greer's glossary at the end of the book and various translation charts scattered throughout the pages are both hilarious and revealing insider looks at Hollywood lingo.)

Read this book if you're thinking about trying to make it as a writer or want to sell a script. While you might not get all the answers on every question you have, you'll come away with a much deeper understanding of how script sales work. (Since the book is on agenting specifically, Greer stays away from delving too deeply into what pitching means or other how-to topics that so many other books cover.) I'm sure Greer herself would advise that any writer learn as much as possible about the "biz" before trying to launch their careers. In fact, she wrote a book so they would. Drop the $15 and sit down with this next weekend. You'll be glad you did.

Thursday, January 08, 2009

DVD Junkie #4: Nip/Tuck


Now I just want to say, despite what may transpire in the paragraphs to follow, this show is very close to my heart in many ways. Nip/Tuck is known for great music editing, beautiful design, and some of the best special effects makeup guys in the business. But what really sets this show apart from its peers is the writing. Honestly, i don't know what to think about the writers. either they have more fun than anyone else in the business, or they've gone completely shit-eatingly bonkers. And I mean bonkers - Tom Cruise without a publicist bonkers. Gary Busey off his meds bonkers. Amy Winehouse with a Chinese finger trap bonkers.

The first positive thing that floats to mind for me with Nip/Tuck is that the promos are great. This will be the first time (of probably hundreds) that I'll laud the skills of those talented people who think up and execute promos for FX - the slickness, the richness, and above all, the specificity that goes into thos promos is fantastic. This season they've been teasing us since August with Follies style dancers in low-cut tops dancing with over-sized medical instruments, and there's even some Kanye to back it up.

What's great is that the slick promos are actually backed up by real substance - FX is the most consistent cable network on TV for excellent original programming. With their dramas, they've had very few out and out bad shows. They're like the less-extreme cousin to HBO and Showtime - and I have a theory that the conservative limits placed on them by being "just" a cable network has forced them to spend a lot more time and effort on producing a high quality product than a good number of their premium cable rivals. This is mirrored in the kind of talent they attract - their shows have garnered long-running starring and guest starring roles by Oscar winning and high-octane actors (and don't try to feed me any Timothy Hutton crap. I'm talking Glenn Close, Peter Dinklage, Forest Whitaker, and Danny DeVito here, among others. Timothy Hutton won for Ordinary People, and I had to imdb him to even know that, and now he's in a show on TNT so i think we can all agree that shit don't count). I'll be tackling many of these FX shows one at a time, but all you need to know now is that FX usually ain't nothing to fuck wit' when it comes to original programming. Nip/Tuck on the other hand, definitely is.

Nip/Tuck tells the story of two Miami plastic surgeons who are best friends and have a joint practice - one's a poon-hound playboy type, the other's a family man. As they help people with their increasingly ridiculous plastic surgery needs, the slight semblance of reality that helped the audience make it through the first season is stripped away, to expose the viewer to the true madness that lies at the heart of any writer who goes into a project without a beat sheet or a series bible.

Firstly, Nip/Tuck is trashy - it's like if the cast members of Dynasty all got medical degrees and tans, then opened shop in General Hospital - but it's trashy with such reckless abandon, with such wanton lack of regard for everyone involved - viewer and character alike - that you can't help but be at least fascinated. And the fact is, the first season sets up the characters so succinctly and beautifully that you actually care about what happens to these awful, awful people. The writers' flair for the overblown is so predictable you can see plot twists brewing from three episodes off, but you still watch, because it's that fucking fun.

ZOMGLESBIANS!!! We cast Portia De Rossi as a LESBIAN!
ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED?


As the show has moved from one season to the next, the plot has been stretched thinner than an aging socialite's skin. The first two seasons were the only ones with any real plot to them, and honestly if you're looking for an engaging story, that's where you should stop. Because of the way the second season ends, you may be tempted to continue to the third - but trust me, it's not worth it. That way, madness lies, as it is slowly revealed that no one had any idea where they were going with any of this. After the half-hearted attempt at plot that the third season presents, the show transforms into some dadaist exquisite corpse, disjointed and without any real glue to hold the whole thing together. Seriously, it's like they have four people on the writing staff, and one of them knows current events, and the next has a medial dictionary, and the next has a wish list from the effects department, and the last one took a screenwriting workshop at the learning annex and left halfway through because they wanted to make him watch foreign films and he "doesn't go to the movies to read".

You think I'm joking, but it's true.

I realized that the writing of Nip/Tuck had been turned over to the Harry Potter slash writers that got banned from livejournal during the episode that one of the major, longtime characters has their kidney stolen, and not one person on the show bats an eye. This was during season four, so I hung on far longer than anyone really should, but still. Season Four is unusual in several ways, most notably for the fact that this is the season when things truly start flying off the handle in earnest. One of the only grounding forces in this shit-storm of crazy is an excellent cameo by Peter Dinklage, who brings a tiny modicum of respectability to the show that is quickly countered by an even more prominent cameo by Rosie O'Donnell.

And guess what? One of these two guys fucks Rosie O'Donnell
ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAIIIIIINED?


After season four, everyone finally realized the show was going to die a slow, painful death if they didn't enact a major paradigm shift, which they did by moving the show's location from Miami to Los Angeles. This gave them a chance to change things fundamentally. They could have struck off into another bold direction, marking new territory and reclaiming the emotional connection they once had with their viewers. And what do they do instead? The delve into meth, build-a-bear, and have a cameo from everyone's favorite questionably famous hoodrat New York.

Despite the writing, one of the reasons I originally became interested in Nip/Tuck, and one of the truly unimpeachable parts of the show's concept and design, is their special effects make-up. Throughout their seasons, Nip/Tuck's make-up is impeccable in a way that special effects makeup usually isn't - in most shows and movies, usually once you know what to look for in effects you can spot places where the artists have slacked off - a seam here, some overzealous stippling there - but Nip/Tuck's makeup has a craftsmanship to it that is uncanny. In my five years of watching this show I can't think of any time the effects have been obviously lacking or lazy. it's pretty gruesome, honestly - there's a lot of gore in the surgeries, and little is left to the imagination, but the ridiculousness of the plot is complemented nicely by the pseudo-realistic brutality of what is actually done to bodies and faces during even the most mundane procedures. Interestingly enough, it's that realistic feel that helps take this show over the top.

I must admit, though, for all of the bullshit and ridiculousness this show has put me through, I'm still watching. Season six started this week, and once again I'm hopeful that these writers can turn it around. I mean, they've got everything going for them. The acting is excellent at it's best and only flat at its worst. The design is fantastic, and as the show has grown more unreal and stylized, the costumes and sets have reflected that. Everyone else is working together seamlessly, it's just the writing that needs to get in line and stop letting everyone down. Seriously. What the hell, people?

DVD Junkie is a weekly review of TV Series on DVD. Kosmic takes her cable dramas seriously, and actually enjoys this show a lot, because of the horrible writing.

What, When, Where this Weekend - The Unborn, Bride Wars, Just Another Love Story

What, When, Where is a weekly guide to select screenings, discussions and events in the NYC-area of interest to screenwriters. Have an event you'd like to see listed here? Give us a heads-up at info@screenwritersleague.com.

- Film Forum is screening a new print of Godard's classic Made in U.S.A.

Opening this weekend...

THE UNBORN, written and directed by David S. Goyer


Premise: Haunted by strange dreams and recurring ghostly visions, Casey Beldon turns to a spiritual advisor for help. Together, they learn that Casey had a twin brother who never made it to term, and that her intended sibling is tied to a curse that requires Casey's death in order to manifest itself in our world.

Playing: Everywhere.

I'd be lying if I said I wasn't sold by the poster right off the bat. But, it's written by David S. Goyer (The Dark Knight, Dark City, Kickboxer 2) which gives me a little hope. It looks creepy from the trailer. But, the PG-13 rating worries me. (Has there been a good PG-13 Hollywood horror flick since The Ring?)

This is one of those movies I'm a complete sucker for - I really, really want it to be good.

BRIDE WARS, written by Greg DePaul and Casey Wilson, dir. by Gary Winick


Premise: Two best friends become rivals when a clerical error results in their respective weddings being held at the same place ... on the same day.

Playing: Everywhere.

Anne Hathaway could potentially be up for an Oscar for Rachel Getting Married while doing the publicity rounds for this movie. I can't say I have any interest in this one, but I expect Cake Man will be lining up for the midnight showing.

JUST ANOTHER LOVE STORY, written and directed by Ole Bornedal


Premise: JUST ANOTHER LOVE STORY is about Jonas, a likeable but world-weary husband with a wife and two kids who lives in a leafy suburb and whose life takes an unexpected twist when he inadvertently if at all causes Julia to crash her car and go into a coma. When Julia comes out of her coma her memory has vanished. Via a grotesque mix-up she and her nearest and dearest believe that when Jonas pops into the hospital to see how she is, he is in fact Sebastian, her exotic new boyfriend, whom they had all been expecting to fly in from abroad. Jonas assumes Sebastians identity and pretends to be the man Julia believes is the love of her life: a brand new identity, a brand new life, and an untrammeled existence full of promise opens up to Jonas. But real life can't be lived on fantasy and exotic dreams, and one day the truth comes knocking at the door.

Playing: Cinema Village

The plot description (ganked from IMDB) doesn't make this Danish film sound remotely as interesting as the Time Out New York review does. No mention at all of corpses or morgues - and it sounds like this film is chock full of 'em!

What are you doing/seeing this weekend?

2008 Spec Script Sales


Here at the League, we're doing a lot of talking about selling our specs recently (what with our query letters and competition hopes and whatnot). We came upon this listing of spec sales posted by Scott Myers at Go Into The Story. What's really cool about this breakdown is that Scott's done it by which managers and agents were attached to each of the sales made throughout the year. Obviously, the big guys like WMA and CAA (for agencies) and Benderspink (management) are leading the charge. But, if you're thinking of sending out those queries, the list should give you an idea of who else might be worth querying.

It's also worth checking out Scott's breakdowns of the spec sales by genre and studio.

Keep in mind, though, that these genres can flip-flop overnight. Since there were so many comedies bought up, Hollywood might decide that 2009 is the year of the Historical Epic (wouldn't you love that, Onyx) and let the comedy trend die out for the time being. Granted, that's an exaggeration of how it'd happen, but just remember that what's hot yesterday might be ice cold today.